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读后续写Part1 - 动作、语言表情感

语言描写

语言是读后续写中最重要的内容之一,一般表现为对话。对话描写需注意以下几点:

对话必须服务情节

对话不宜过多,且必须为推动故事情节服务。由于续写篇幅较短,答题区域可谓“寸土寸金”,因此对话中不能有任何废话,且能够推动情节发展或刻画人物性格,否则容易造成其他内容(神态、动作、环境等)不够位置的情况。

即使无内容可写,也切忌用对话滥竽充数。可考虑加入环境和人物细节描写。

尽可能删除日常寒暄:“How is the weather?” “Terrific! Nice day for a walk, isn’t it?”

善用“对话标签”

灵活运用对话标签的4种形式:在前、在后、中间、省略。值得一提的是,当引用"yes"之类的回答,或是渲染紧张、快速的节奏时,对话标签可以省略。此外,描述说话时的伴随动作,也可省略对话标签,如:

“Wow, that’s just great.” He stomped to his room and slammed the door so hard the house shook.

在对话标签中加入描述。适当的描述,包括语气、音调、情感等,可以为情景再现作贡献。比如:

  • in a soft low tone / voice
  • in a tone of impatience / command / surprise / ...
  • "..." she asked incredulously.
  • "..." I replied with embarrassment.

使用适当的动词,而不是全用said。

  • Quietly: Mouthed, whispered, hissed, mumbled, muttered, said, under their breath.

  • Loudly: Yelled, shouted, bellowed, screamed, roared.

  • Anger: Shouted, bellowed, yelled, snapped, cautioned, rebuked.

  • Affection: Consoled, comforted, reassured, admired, soothed.

  • Excitement: Shouted, yelled, babbled, gushed, exclaimed.

  • Fear: Whispered, stuttered, stammered, gasped, urged, hissed, babbled, blurted.

  • Determination: Declared, insisted, maintained, commanded.

  • Happiness: Sighed, murmured, gushed, laughed.

  • Sadness: Cried, mumbled, sobbed, sighed, lamented.

  • Conflict: Jabbed, sneered, rebuked, hissed, scolded, demanded, threatened, insinuated, spat, glowered.

  • Making up: Apologised, relented, agreed, reassured, placated, assented.

  • Amusement: Teased, joked, laughed, chuckled, chortled, sniggered, tittered, guffawed, giggled, roared.

  • Storytelling: Related, recounted, continued, emphasized, remembered, recalled, resumed, concluded.

更精确的动词

表示“走”的动词

替换词中文释义例句
dart (dash)急奔They both darted for the gun at the same time.
shoot急奔The girl shot across the room to close the door in time.
sprint短距离快速奔跑He sprinted for the line. He sprinted out of the burning room.
scurry碎步疾跑The children scurried into their different hiding places before Billy finished counting.
skip (hop, trot)小步快跑She was so happy she skipped all the way home.
lope轻松地大步跑The tall man loped through the hall without noticing the excitement outside.
bound跳跃着跑The dog bounded through the grass to get the ball.
flee逃跑When he looked away, Lisa fled from the violent man with the knife.
jog慢跑He tends to jog, instead of run, because of his heart condition.
scamper(儿童)欢快地奔走Triumphant, the mouse scampered away with the cheese.
crawl爬行;缓慢地行进The soldiers crawled under the wire to escape.
scrambleThe group scrambled out of the way of the falling bricks.
stumble绊脚;蹒跚而行The drunkard stumbled out of the bar.
shift挪动Though he was blocking the doorway, he refused to shift.
trudge /traipse疲惫地走;拖沓地行走The gardener had to trudge through two feet of mud to find the lost shoe.
stroll闲逛I like to stroll through the park at least once a week.
pace来回踱步The lion paced around the cowering zoo-keeper.
sidle犹犹豫豫地走Having planted the poison, the spy sidled back out of the room.
drop落下Overwhelmed by the music, he dropped to his knees and cried.
hike徒步旅行The scouts hiked up the mountain.

与身体有关的动词

  1. He hung/ dropped/ lowered/ bent/ bowed his head in shame. 他羞愧地低下了头。

  2. They nodded their heads in agreement. 他们点头同意。

  3. She shook her head in disbelief. 她怀疑地摇摇头。

  4. He scratched his head, not understanding a word. 他挠了挠头,一个字也听不懂。

  5. She buried her head in the pillow. 她用枕头捂住脑袋。

  6. She rested her head on his shoulder. 她将头靠在他的肩膀上。

  7. His head drooped and tears fell into his lap. 他弃拉着脑袋,眼泪滴落在大腿上。

  8. I fell asleep as soon as my head hit the pillow. 我头一碰到枕头就睡着了。

  9. He put/held his head in his hands, greatly annoyed. 他双手抱头,十分生气。

Face

  1. A bright smile appeared on/ spread across/crossed his face. 他的脸上露出了灿烂的笑容。

  2. Her face lit up/ brightened/ glowed when I gave her the present. 我给她礼物时,他的脸上焕发出了光彩。

  3. His face suddenly grew serious. 他的表情突然严肃起来。

  4. His face looked a little confused. 他看起来有点因惑。

  5. Jack's face flushed/ burned with embarrassment. 杰克窘得满脸通红。

  6. Her face paled with fright. 她吓得脸都白了。

Cheek

  1. He rested his cheek on her shoulder. 他将面颊靠在她的肩上。

  2. He felt his cheeks burning with shame. 他因为羞愧而感到脸颊发烧。

  3. Her cheeks were wet with tears. 她泪流满面。

  4. Color rushed/ flooded/ rose to her cheeks when she realized she was being watched. 意识到有人在看她,她顿时涨红了脸。

  5. A tear slid down her cheek. 一滴泪顺着她的脸颊滑落下来。

Eye

  1. His eyes were wide with horror. 他惊恐地瞪大了眼睛。

  2. The dog's hungry eyes fell on my sandwich. 那条狗饥饿的目光落在我的三明治。

  3. He turned his eyes to the door when he heard the handle turning. 听到门把转动的声音,他向门那边看去。

  4. Tina squeezed her eyes shut and bit her lip. 蒂娜闭上双眼,咬了咬嘴唇。

  5. She looked at her father straight in the eye and answered his question truthfully. 她直视父亲的眼睛,诚实地回答了他的问题。

  6. He seemed unwilling to meet my eyes. 他似乎不愿意与我的目光接触。

  7. She laughed, her eyes shining/ sparking/ sparkling/ glistening/ glowing with excitement. 她笑了,眼里闪烁着兴奋的光芒。

  8. She tried to sit up, her eyes fixed on Jean's face. 她试图坐起来,目光紧盯着琼的脸。

  9. Tears blurred / clouded her eyes / vision. 泪水模糊了她的双眼。

  10. I felt tears well up in my eyes. 我感到泪水在眼里涌出来。

Mouth

  1. She opened her mouth to say something. 她张开嘴要说什么。

  2. Our mouths dropped open in surprise. 我们惊奇地张大了嘴。

  3. My mouth started watering when I smelled the food. 闻到食物的香味,我开始流口水了。

  4. His mouth widened to a smile. 他咧开嘴笑了。

  5. Suddenly a hand cupped her mouth. 突然一只手扣住了她的嘴。

  6. A smile played around his mouth. 他的嘴上挂着一丝笑意。

  7. My heart was in my mouth when I walked into her office. 我走进她办公室的时候,紧张得心都到了喉咙口。

Hand

  1. She took the child’s hand and helped him climb up the steps. 她拉住孩子的手牵着他爬上台阶。

  2. He reached for her hand and held it tightly. 他伸手抓住她的手并紧紧握住。

  3. He grasped the rope with both hands. 他双手抓着绳子。

  4. He shook my hands as if we were long lost friends. 他握住我的手好像我们是失散多年的朋友。

  5. She smiled and held out/reached out a hand in welcome. 她笑着伸出一只手表示欢迎。

  6. She put her hands to her cheeks in embarrassment. 窘迫之中她用双手捂住了脸。

  7. Several students raised their hands to answer the question. 几个学生举手回答问题。

  8. He slid his hands into his pockets. 他悄悄地将手插进口袋里。

  9. Her hands shook/trembled as she lifted the glass to her lips. 她的手颤抖着把杯子送到唇边。

  10. I cupped my hand over the phone so they couldn't hear me. 我用手捂住电话,免得他们听到我的话。

Leg

  1. She crossed the finish line on tired legs. 她用她那疲惫的双腿穿过了终点线。
  2. He rose to his feet on shaky legs. 他双腿颤抖地站了起来。
  3. His legs were so weak that he could hardly stand. 他腿软的几乎站不住了。
  4. After the accident he had no feeling in his legs. 事故过后,他的腿丧失了知觉。
  5. The mud stuck to her boots, making her feet heavy and her legs tired. 她的靴子上沾满了泥,使她举步沉重,双腿疲惫不堪。
  6. Jill crossed her legs and rested her chin on one fist, as if lost in deep thought. 吉尔盘着腿,一个拳头支若下巴,仿佛陷入了沉思。
  1. He got shakily to his feet. 他颤抖地站了起来。

  2. She jumped to her feet when she heard the news. 当她听到这个消息时,她跳了起来。

  3. She dragged her feet as she reluctantly followed her parents. 她不情愿地跟在父母后面,磨磨躇躇地走着。

  4. My feet slipped as I was about to shoot and I missed the ball. 当我正要射门的时候脚下滑了一下,一脚踢空。

Finger

  1. The teacher raised a warning finger and we stopped talking. 老师举起一个手指以示警告,我们停止了交谈。

  2. She raised/held up a finger to her lip to ask for silence. 她把一根手指举到唇边,要求肃静。

  3. "None of that!" cried the teacher, wagging/waving her finger. “这些都不是!“老师摇着手指喊道。

  4. I dipped my finger in the sauce and licked it. 我把手指醮着酱汁婖了婖。

Arm

  1. He was running forward, waving his arms. 他向前跑着,挥动着双臂。

  2. He stood there with crossed arms, looking angry. 他站在那里,双臂交叉,看上去很生气。

  3. She folded her arms and stared at him. 她双臂交叉,盯着他。

  4. He held out/opened his arms with a broad smile. 他微笑着伸出/张开双臂。

  5. He reached out a hand and caught hold of/grabbed/took/ her arm. 他伸出一只手抓住她的胳膊。

  6. She moved closer to her father and took his arm. 她走近父亲,挽住他的胳膊。

  7. They walked along arm in arm. 他们手挽手走着

  8. He ran up to her and put/threw/ his arms around her. 他跑到她跟前,搂住她。

Shoulder

  1. When I asked him why he had done it, he just shrugged his shoulders. 当我问他为什么这么做时,他只是耸耸肩。

  2. The child sat on her father's shoulders to watch the parade go by. 那孩子坐在她父亲的肩膀上看游行经过。 3.He shouldered open the door. 他用肩顶开了门。

  3. He looked (back) over his shoulder. 他回头看了看。

Back

  1. He smiled and gave me a hearty slap/pat on the back. 他笑了笑,狠狠地打了我后背一巴掌。

  2. They tied his hands behind his back. 他们把他的手绑在背后。

  3. He was carrying a small child on his back. 他背着一个小孩。

Knee

  1. Suddenly her knees buckled/weakened and she fell to the floor. 突然,她的膝盖弯曲/虚弱,她摔倒在地板上。
  2. He hugged his knees to keep warm. 他抱着膝盖取暖。
  3. He went/got down on his knees and begged for forgiveness. 他跪下乞求原谅。
  4. He was on his knees, searching for the missing ring. 他跪在地上,寻找丢失的戒指。

Stomach

  1. My tummy/belly/stomach let out an enormous rumble / started to rumble.

  2. A rumbling stomach/The sound of my stomach rumbling betrayed me.

  3. Pangs of hunger(饥饿引起的胃疼) suddenly struck me. 【生词】pang n.突然的疼痛

情感表达(含动作、语言)

通用 Generic terms

注:尖叫括号可替换。

  1. I was overwhelmed by / overcome by / wild with / immersed in <emotion>
  2. My heart / I brimmed with <emotion> when ...
  3. Seized/Brimmed with <emotion>, she …
  4. A <surprise> that he was unable to hide registerd on his face. register vt.流露出;注册
  5. A flood of <fear> well up in / flooded over in him.
  6. A surge / thrill / shiver of <excitement> flowed over him.
  7. I couldn’t restrain / contain my <joy>.

开心 Happiness

  • Jason was whistling merrily as he walked home from school.
  • Mary looked very pleased when her friends sang her a song.
  • Steve was grinning from ear to ear when his parents praised him.
  • Julian flushed with delight when he was declared as the winner of the competition.
  • Peter skipped home cheerfully after school.
  • The girls were in high spirits when they realized that they have made it to the final round of the singing competition.
  • The dog wagged its tail happily as it followed its owner for a walk in the park.
  • She was as happy as a lark(百灵鸟;欢乐).
  • At the thought of this, a long-expected smile flickered across Lucy's lips.
  • flash a shy smile(露出羞涩的笑容)
  • He beamed broadly at his parents with relief/pleasure/satisfaction/pride. 向他的父母投以灿烂笑容。
  • The girl placed the bag in my hand with a beaming smile.
  • wear a smile
  • grin at sb. (咧着嘴笑)
  • giggle at sb. (咯咯笑)
  • laugh heartily (开怀大笑)
  • laugh out loud(捧腹大笑)

激动 Excitement

  • That was amazing!” Jill cried in delight.
  • Thank you so much!” Lucy exclaimed joyfully as the boy returned the wallet to her.
  • Look what I have found! A brand new wallet!” she exclaimed gleefully.
  • “My favorite ice-cream!” James squealed in delight.
  • I am sure we will make it to the next round!” said Peter, smiling from ear to ear.
  • The teacher nodded with satisfaction and thumbed up at him.
  • Her heart beat so fast and she was full to the brim with joy(充满喜悦).
  • I was so excited that I could hardly sleep.
  • His heart pounded in excitement as he raced towards the park.
  • Jane was head over heels with excitement when Mrs.Tan told her that the class would be going to the cinema.
  • Michelle trembled with excitement as she opened the mystery gift.
  • There was a buzz of excitement in the air as the teams get ready to for the match.
  • I felt a jolt of excitement when Miss Lee told me that I won the first prize in the Math quiz.
  • The on-looking crowd cheered and Marry began to shed tears of joy. 旁观的人们欢呼起来,Mary开始喜极而泣。
  • She could hardly conceal her excitement the moment she knew she was admitted.
  • The little girl went wild with joy at the news that her father would take her to the Disneyland.
  • She opened the gift with her hands shaking slightly.
  • She couldn't keep her hands from drifting to her belly. She thought of what was growing there, and happiness rushed in like a gust of wind blowing a door wide open. Her eyes watered. (From A Thousand Splendid Suns)《灿烂千阳》

惊讶 Surprise

  • I was truly amazed when the magician turned the girl into a rabbit.
  • He was deeply puzzled by the treasure chest in the corner. “What could be inside?” he wondered.
  • Jessica was fascinated by the tricks that she saw in the magic show.
  • To her great surprise, no one was in the room.
  • Her eyes widened in surprise as the thief approached her.
  • Mandy could not believe her eyes when she saw so many gifts on her table.
  • My eyes nearly popped out when I saw the prize tag on the dress.
  • The news took him by surprise.
  • Mike’s jaw dropped as he realized he had beaten his own best record.
  • The twins raised their eyebrows with wonder written all over their faces.
  • be in wide-eyed surprise/amazement

愤怒 Anger

  • She went red with fury when she realized that someone took her bag away.

  • The principal was very crossed with the pupils who played truant.

  • The girl glared at the bullies angrily.

  • She blew her top when she was scolded for no reason.

  • His face was as black as thundercloud. No one dared to go near him.

  • Jimmy clenched his fists in anger and went up to the bullies.

  • Jack’s father was fuming with anger when he could not find Jack in his room.

失望 Disappointment

  • The teacher was utterly disappointed by the pupils’ results.

  • She felt disheartened when she was not chosen to be on the school team.

  • Mary hung her head in disappointment when she failed the test.

  • Her hopes were dashed when she learnt that she was not selected for the play.

  • Susan was dealt with a big blow when her dog passed away.

  • She looked so sad and crestfallen.

  • “I can’t believe we lost the game!” John cried out in dismay.

  • Disappointment was written all over her face.

  • The hot sun was burning us and deadly silence, swallowed (死寂吞噬) the road thoroughly, leaving nothing but hopelessness (只留下绝望) .

忧郁 Worries

  • Worried and depressed, I wandered along the road aimlessly.
  • After what seemed to be ages, I scratched my head, stamped my foot and finally I couldn't help sobbing.
  • I kept pacing back and forth (踱步) like an ant on a hot pan.
  • On our way back home, my father, holding my hand tight, worn a big frown (眉头紧锁).
  • A frown now stood on his face.

难过 Sadness

  • She is a bit down in the dumps because she's got to take her exams again.

  • After his wife died in a car accident, he was left grief-stricken.

  • Sounds like you are at the end of your rope.

  • Hearing the news, she was totally overwhelmed by grief.

  • Seeing the ending of the letter, she couldn't contain her sorrow and tears rolled down her cheeks.

  • Heartbroken but fearless, I decided to turn everything around.

  • He returned to his room, tears rolling down beyond control.

  • A surge of sadness welled up in him.

  • A wave of frustration struck him, overwhelming him so suddenly that he was at a loss what to say/do.

  • At that moment, Jane was ovenvhelmed with sadness and cried bitterly, tears streaming down her cheeks.

  • "l can't…" She murmured, her head drooping and her eyes downcast.

  • l stuttered out my request, my heart torn between expectation and guilt.

  • He shook his head, heaving a deep sigh of sorrow/sighing in despair.

  • In the boundless search, she found it impossible to fi nd a way out, which threw her into desperation.

  • Maria burst out crying, choking out what she had meant to do for him.

恐惧/紧张 Fear/Tension

词组翻译
violent heartbeat剧烈心跳
be scared to death被吓死
freeze with terror因恐惧呆住了
be seized by a strong sense of horror被强烈的恐惧吓呆了
be nearly suffocated/ˈsʌfəkeɪt/ by terror因恐惧差点窒息
be struck with horror惊恐万状
strike fear into one's heart使胆战心惊
shake all over in a cold sweat浑身发抖,冒冷汗
make one's hair stand on end毛骨悚然
with one’s heart leaping with terror心惊胆战
  • As the sound of the footsteps became louder, my body started to shiver with fear.

  • May turned pale with fright as the snake glided towards her.

  • I could hear my heart pounding so fast.

  • I could hear my heart pounding with nervousness.

  • With assumed calmness(故作镇定) he replied in a weak and trembling voice(颤颤巍巍的声音).

  • When I first started college, I was a nervous wreck(紧张死了).

  • I stay rooted to the ground, unable to move as I was paralysed with fear.

  • The trip has become a total nightmare for them.

  • “Look out!” Danny shrieked(尖叫) in fright.

  • Joline yelled out in fear as she saw two bears running towards her.

  • I got cold feet at the last minute and decided not to go on the roller coaster ride.

  • The bride had butterflies in her stomach as she got ready to walk down the aisle.

  • The thought of us residing in utter blindness petrified(v.使吓呆) me!

  • She was left with the lingering fear(心有余悸) that he would not return.

  • At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I felt so scared that my heart was pounding with fear, my throat tightened and my knees felt weak. (嗓子发紧,膝盖发软)

  • At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I froze with terror, too scared to move an inch. (吓呆了,不敢动弹)

  • At the sight of the ferocious wolf, I was seized by a strong sense of horror and my palms were sweating. (被深深地恐惧感所控制,手心出汗)

  • The sight of the gun just made my hair stand on end. 看到枪,我毛骨悚然。

  • At this thought, those horrific scenes of shark attack in movies flashed across her mind, sending a numbing chill down her spine.

  • This horrible thought made her hair stand on end(使她毛骨悚然).

  • Seized with terrible panic, she made a desperate attempt to climb onto the top of her surfboard to find out what was swimming below.

  • “Shark!” Betty was numb with shock, hardly uttering a single word as if her throat had been stuck.

  • As a green hand on first aid, she found her heart beating wildly and her palms sweating, fearing that any operational slip would cause great pain on Roy.

  • At this thought, those horrific scenes of shark attack in movies flashed through her mind, sending a numbing chill down her spine.

  • “Shark!” Betty was numb with shock, hardly uttering a single word as if her throat had been stuck.

  • With the streamlined body constantly bumping against her feet, Betty, seized with panic, struggled upward in a desperate attempt to climb onto her surfboard.

  • Numb with terror, I was too shocked to move an inch, daring only to cast a nervous glance at the man behind the counter.

  • So frightened was Arthur that he ran faster wi th that suitcase, shouting on top of his voice, “I'm no robber."

厌倦 Tiredness

  • I was completely exhausted after a long day at work.

  • She collapsed in exhaustion on her big bed.

  • Samuel rubbed his weary eyes, trying to keep himself awake.

  • He dozed off immediately after he sat on the couch.

  • After a night of computer games, his eyes were bleary.

  • He was physically and mentally exhausted.

好奇 Curiosity

  • Luke’s curious eyes noticed everything around him.

  • Out of curiosity, she decided to open the black box.

  • Rachel pokes her nose into everything and she was known as the busybody in the class.

叹气 Breathe

  • gasp 喘息
  • pant 气喘吁吁
  • breathe a sigh of relief 松了一口气
  • heave a long sigh 长叹一口气
  • take a deep breath 深吸一口气
  • Finally, after what seemed like a century, he heaved a long sigh and said...

感激 Gratitude

  • I brimmed with (充满着) gratitude when ...
  • Touched immensely, I ...
  • I nodded my head with gratitude, eyes glistening(闪耀着) with held-back tears.
  • I was deeply affected by her kindness.
  • He faintly giving a grateful nod to Ada.
  • Casting a grateful look at her life-saver, she choked, “Had it not been for your timely rescue, I would have been burned to death in the big fire. ”
  • Finding Mac safe and sound(安然无恙), his friends were so grateful that they repeatedly voiced thanks to the life-savers.
  • Deeply affected by her kindness, I stroked her head gently, expressing my heartfelt gratitude to her and the family.
  • I stood still looking in their direction, my heart brimming with appreciation.

羞愧/后悔 Shame / Regret

  • His face flamed with shame and he stole out without being noticed.

  • Shame suddenly silenced me.

  • As time passed by, the guilt became too much to bear.

  • My head drooping, I felt a flush of embarrassment spreading across my cheeks.

  • A flush/blush of embarrassment crept over my cheeks. 【生词】creep-crept-crept-creeping vi. 爬行

  • My head drooping and my cheeks burning with shame, I admitted having gone to the movie.

  • A surge of regret gnawed at my heart.

  • A wave of guilt swept over me.

  • droop one’s head with cheeks blushing with embarrassment/shame

  • be torn apart by shame

其他

  • My heart was torn between expectation and guilt. 我的心在期待和内疚之间徘徊。

严肃

  • Before I could stop him, he turned around and started walking along the dusty roads, his face stern and grim.

沉思

  • But there was only a dreadful silence and my father looked as if deep in thought, making no response to my confession.
  • Finally, after what seemed like a century, he heaved a long sigh and said...

冷静

  • However, in the face of her son's nervous eyes and the suspicious looks of the other family members, Ben's mother remained calm.
  • In the study(书房),calmly bathed in the light, his mother's face showed no sign of anger.

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